A rap poem I wrote after it all happened at my HS...

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"Accomplished"

Goin' to school every morning in the cold
I have one mission, I assume I've been told
To get good grades, to try very hard
It comes at a price, however
My feelings, my emotions, my heart,
At the end of the day
Are often broken and scarred
The student body assumes I'm a fag
Because I decide to wear pink one day
Who the hell decided they were gonna tell me what to wear
I deal with their crap every cold damn day
And the ladies?
Forget them
Every one of em in my class has given me a scar
Let me mention it is intentional, they try so hard
To bring me down, to cause me pain
Sometimes I feel as though I wanna get em slain
Gross, stupid, you name it
I've been called at by the ladies
They avoid me and call the stuck up retards hot
I'm not exactly jealous but I don't want to hurt the guys
Except one of them
This one's a freakin' prep in a man's body
Makes fun of me every single day
He sounds like Daffy Duck
He should be made fun of
And in my 4th hour
There's this annoyin lil jock
He calls me bi, despite the fact that I'm not
He constantly pushes my desk out of line in my row
Calls me a fag
Knocks my stuff of my desk
I retaliate sometimes
Throw his stuff down the row
Makes him shut up
Thats all I want to see
All these selfish kids
Bein shocked to death
And yet
I also don't want to
I do but I don't
Wanna see them in pain
I don't get it, I'll never be the same
My benevolent nature holds back my vicious rage
That vicious rage makes even me feel like cryin
In the peaceful depths of the pool
This one red headed chick
Makes more scars that hurt me deeply
Cause one guy dunks me a lot
I really dont mind
But she laughs every time it happens
Every time
At me
Sadistically
I wanna friggin beat her up
Infact I almost did once
Kicked the bitch in the ribs
I think I've made my point quite clear
Despite the scars, hate, burning rage,
And even the depression at the end of the day
I've gotten strait A's
I'm takin this seriously
Despite my broken soul
My mission's been accomplished
 
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IonClawz said:
"Accomplished"

Goin' to school every morning in the cold
I have one mission, I assume I've been told
To get good grades, to try very hard
It comes at a price, however
My feelings, my emotions, my heart,
At the end of the day
Are often broken and scarred
The student body assumes I'm a fag
Because I decide to wear pink one day
Who the hell decided they were gonna tell me what to wear
I deal with their crap every cold damn day
And the ladies?
Forget them
Every one of em in my class has given me a scar
Let me mention it is intentional, they try so hard
To bring me down, to cause me pain
Sometimes I feel as though I wanna get em slain
Gross, stupid, you name it
I've been called at by the ladies
They avoid me and call the stuck up retards hot
I'm not exactly jealous but I don't want to hurt the guys
Except one of them
This one's a freakin' prep in a man's body
Makes fun of me every single day
He sounds like Daffy Duck
He should be made fun of
And in my 4th hour
There's this annoyin lil jock
He calls me bi, despite the fact that I'm not
He constantly pushes my desk out of line in my row
Calls me a fag
Knocks my stuff of my desk
I retaliate sometimes
Throw his stuff down the row
Makes him shut up
Thats all I want to see
All these selfish kids
Bein shocked to death
And yet
I also don't want to
I do but I don't
Wanna see them in pain
I don't get it, I'll never be the same
My benevolent nature holds back my vicious rage
That vicious rage makes even me feel like cryin
In the peaceful depths of the pool
This one red headed chick
Makes more scars that hurt me deeply
Cause one guy dunks me a lot
I really dont mind
But she laughs every time it happens
Every time
At me
Sadistically
I wanna friggin beat her up
Infact I almost did once
Kicked the bitch in the ribs
I think I've made my point quite clear
Despite the scars, hate, burning rage,
And even the depression at the end of the day
I've gotten strait A's
I'm takin this seriously
Despite my broken soul
My mission's been accomplished
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oh god its rap,plz kill me
 
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Yo, G-dog.. rap money clip grippa...

Not sure where your from but where I went to school at if you wore a pink shirt basicly you were asking for it....

And if dudes are callin you ghey,.. Get yourself some muti-colored spray paint and rainbow there cars... or just get the big sticker letters and put them on the back where they would probably not notice until they drove around town for a few blocks or got home.... :thumbsup:




you should have called that a poem lol and started it in writers block...because rap sux.. :thumbsdn: :D



welcome to wtf.com you pink shirt wearin newb you.. :mfinger: :D
 
Icarus

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Dude... Pink is a popular color for guys at my school.

Kick their asses! Then move it to Writer's Block.

Also, what's a "Rap Poem"? Is that anything like Rap? Or is it a poem? They're two very different things...
 
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Rap usually has a message... I fail to see clearly what you're trying to say, though. Sounds like you're saying you had a hard time in high school, but what for?
 
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First off, this is a n00b mistake, and howmany of you have done the same thing? so dont be asses about it. Second, he obviously has some emotional issues, so telling him to go kill himself is just a fucking ASSHOLE thing to do. Third, iron, fuck them. There is more out there than school, trust me I know. Life may seem harsh and uncaring now, and the assholes at school might be your world, but this is not all there is. There is so much more to life than bitches at school.
 
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you asked about your rap. They rhymes are a tad weak. I started to lose some interest in it after awhile. You tried to explain a story but failed to spit it out correctly. You got the rhyming part down some. You just need to let go and get the flow and rhythm. Good luck and keep writing.
 
CopyLifted

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With all the stupid shit that was said in here I thought I was in B&T. :rolleyes: Good thing I looked before hand. Although I really wanted to flame. :p

So what you're a noob and posted this in the wrong forum. So what rap really DOES suck. Atleast you put your feelings out on paper. It was kinda cool, I guess. :confused:
 
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NoSubstance said:
Dude... Pink is a popular color for guys at my school.

Kick their asses! Then move it to Writer's Block.

Also, what's a "Rap Poem"? Is that anything like Rap? Or is it a poem? They're two very different things...
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actually there are not two different things. RAP stands for RAP AND POETRY. and rap doesnt suck! :mad: :mfinger: :sword: :gun:
 
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I think that you put your true feelings out there and I give you credit for that. Don't listen to some of those retards out there who are telling you that it sucked or whatever. Keep up the good work, just don't be depressed all the time, its not healthy.
 
Jung

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I call Eminem parody.
 
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Personally I like Eminem's ability to work with the flow of words and syllables, but this is a little rough around the edges. A lack of vocab and flow are what cause this "rap poem" to lack poetic rythm. Anyway...good try ;)
 
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