Can someone help me finish this poem

[John Howle]

Hey everyone i need some poetry credits and i need help finishing this one:
As i wake up to the sound of a angry man, i lay awake with only the dark hallowness of the world,everything is so dim and transparent.The body feels weak, cant move your arms,legs,or any body part or muscle.You try repeditivley to end it but this happens over and over again. As this cycle repeats the angry mans voice gets louder and more clear. i think im begining to understand.

 

[dustinzgirl]

As I wake up to the sound of a angry man,
I lay awake with only the dark hollowness of the world,
Everything is so dim and transparent.
The body feels weak, cant move your arms,legs,or any body part or muscle.
You try repetitively to end it but this happens over and over again.
As this cycle repeats the angry mans voice gets louder and more clear.
I think I’m beginning to understand.

OK, I can’t finish this without some rewording here.

I wake to the sound of Angry
I close my eyes to the darkness
And open them in the hollow
There is only liquid, transparent
My life is empty, motionless
I close the door in my mind
My body wont move, I’m left behind
Anger screams again. And the blows come.
Clearer now, I see myself
From somewhere outside myself
I wait to die, I wait to breathe
But all I can really do, is cry.

How long does it need to be?