Darkness

BlastemSkyHigh

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Darkness is ever near, it’s become everything I fear.
Grasping onto life, but my hands grabbing for a knife.
Loneliness and all my sorrow, searching for tomorrow.
Emptiness there’s nothing left, I try to take another breath.
Who will win in this war, I hope for nothing, nothing more.
 

MisterFister

There's a very good chance that I don't care.
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Nice cadence and structure but I'm confused by the mixed message. You fear the darkness of death but then hope for nothing more? Maybe the last couplet is ironic? I'm not sure.
 

Piro

From appaled to applauding, controversy.
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Darkness is ever near, it’s become everything I fear.
Grasping onto life, but my hands grabbing for a knife.
Loneliness and all my sorrow, searching for tomorrow.
Emptiness there’s nothing left, I try to take another breath.
Who will win in this war, I hope for nothing, nothing more.
Hello darkness my old friends, here i moan and whine again. Like a butt clogged in memory, tasting like its diarrhea in February. Whatever can I do, when my fingers smell like pooh.? Oh I know, I keep posting shit like this, maybe one day I will find an end in suicidal bliss. (Its just poem, not an invitation).
 

RebelBuddha

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Yeah, I think I get it. Two different darkness's. The one that you see as inevitable... And the other that you wish to escape.

It ain't easy, but...that's that thing that keeps you going. And that's what you need to feed. That sliver.

Let it steele you. Let it puff your chest and say "Do your WORST I WAS BUILT TO WITHSTAND THIS!"

And then pass those lessons forward.

It's all good bro.

Also a great poem but also pretty dark is O'sleep by... I think it's Sir phillip sidney.