Desperation

[bnccoder]

Known by so many,
Understood by so few,
Hated by enemys,
If they only knew,

I wear my mask,
For all to see,
So that they never,
Never see me,

What once was happy,
Now is dead,
And all that's left,
Are the voices in my head,

I look and I look,
Hoping to find,
An end to the tourments,
The tourments of my mind,

Moving forward,
Never blinking,
Cold and empty,
Always thinking,

 

[Taylor_Blade]

I liked it. Short lines, to the point, good expression. Nice.

The only thing I didn't like was, some of the rhymes were a bit predicable.

 

[DIZNUTS]

voices in your head? son did you run out of medications again? lol jk its good

 

[dustinzgirl]

I liked it. Short lines, to the point, good expression. Nice.

The only thing I didn't like was, some of the rhymes were a bit predicable.

Ditto.

but is does flow very nicely.