Fucking Ryhming

[ThingX]

I dont care if this ryhms or not,
and if you do you can rot for all i fucking care or not,
holy shit its ryhming what the fuck,
I swear to god you all really suck.

Look at what you made me do,
ryhming and ryhming and eating fondo.
Thats probably spelt wrong but i dont really care,
I shaved my head i dont have any hair.

I'm kinda like fuzzy that fucking bear
you know the one that had no hair.
I'm a big mother fucker you know its ture,
when i hit you in the face you will go boohoo.

FUCKING A I JUST KEEP RYHMING ITS NOT FUCKING FAIR,
GOD DAMNIT I JUST NEED A CIG AND SOME GOD DAMN AIR.
LOOK AT ME I CAN NOT STOP,
NOT EVEN BY A MOTHER FUCKING COP.

Just kill me now i have no meaning,
unlike others who at least have singing.
People have talent but not like me,
The only talent i have is the talent you cannot see.

 

[bnccoder]

The last half of the fourth stanza needs some work. Good though.

 

[DIZNUTS]

its rhyming not ryhming.......and can we move this to B&T? for our ahem "rep/ryhme(rhyme) contest"

 

[Jessica43999]

All I have to say... is that im very confused... fondou? Fuzzy the bear? the cops? okay.... :confuse: Its an okay poem though... but not emotional enough for me.. i like feelings!! ^.^

 

[ThingX]

eh thanks for critizim cant get better if i dont know if i suck but i was just bored and sorry about the no emotion i was just bored my and fuzzy bear is from fuzzy wazzy was a bear fuzzy wazzy had no hair. yea im just sorry i even wrote it lol sorry for wasteing the time of those who took the time to read it.

 

[Unforgiven]

That was the most entertaining thing I read all day.

Goes to show you can write about anything.

I have a friend who had to write a school topic of about 400 words... so he chose the topic of "nothing" and wrote 400 words about nothing.

 

[ThingX]

Was it like this?
If nothing is something then something is nothing if you say nothing your saying nothing so you are always saying something even if its nothing.

 

[Unforgiven]

Not sure... it was for an exam so I never got to read it.

 

[Icarus]

Funny. ish.

 

[DIZNUTS]

All I have to say... is that im very confused... fondou? Fuzzy the bear? the cops? okay.... :confuse: Its an okay poem though... but not emotional enough for me.. i like feelings!! ^.^

do you want to feel something BIG? while i feel your BOOBIES??? :naughty:

 

[dustinzgirl]

Dizzy, you know better. Dont make me ban you.

Thing, Im not really into the whole angry rapper kind of poetry, I think you could do better. I am a redneck by birth, so mabye I just don't get it.


Oh, and:

Did something come before nothing or nothing come before something?

 

[ThingX]

nothing came first because there cannot be nothing if theres something so it was nothing that became the something.