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[dustinzgirl]

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The last sign of life
Crossed my rocky path
And flittered out of sight

I drew my arrow
Swift and narrow
And struck into the sky

I crossed the earth
Searching for my worth
But found only my sword

The last of my heart
Gave a fleeting beat
And left to the night

 

[Stardust]

I like it goood work

 

[Antisocial85]

Wow I like that. Very well done.

 

[ferengi]

Nice.

 

[skylinec]

Just to be different I'm not going to put a smiley. Shit, I just did. Good work.

 

[DIZNUTS]

its good

 

[empathyiskey]

See now?

All of that didn't rhyme and that was some good fucking poetry.

 

[Taylor_Blade]

All of that didn't rhyme .

It is not about rhyming, it's about the emotion and expression there of.

 

[10 stars]

Pretty good. :banana: Too bad whenever i try to write i go crazy and laugh at myself hysterically :ugly:

 

[empathyiskey]

I know that

It is not about rhyming, it's about the emotion and expression there of.

I was referring to her critique of Shredding the needle. She went on about how the rhyming scheme was off. It wasn't perfect, but who is?