oh the sappiness of it all..

[Black Flame]

kay, this is kinda lame to post on here.. but im fuckin bored, so take it bitch!

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eyes were sore
from looking at nothing but the pain
i had notihng but the pain
i wondered why
everything i thought was wrong
all the waiting was too long
and i'd cry
like a weak and selfish freak
drown in tears i could not speak

you came around
you had been there all along
everything we thought was wrong
i had been found
i didn't know it then
but i'd forget it all
just to live it all again
i swore i'd save you
i didn't know why
but something'd happen if i tried
and now i need you
to fill every second of my life
even after there is no time

when i say i love you
i mean it more than love defines
i'll give you the mountains, trees, and skies
but they're so worthless compared to you
i can do nothing but be true
i will blow away the pain
even if i seem insane
it's all i can do
i don't deserve you

 

[dustinzgirl]

Pretty decent. Need punctuation and more rythm. Kind of throws me off in a few spots.

 

[skylinec]

i'm pretty confuzled really

 

[Black Flame]

well most of my stuff is lyrics, so i suppose it just flows better when there's music to it.

 

[Ctoit]

its okay......although a little depressing, and lacking in selfworth

 

[Black Flame]

i know, pathetic isn't it? =P
most music written will be depressing and lacking in selfworth because that's just what musicians write about. i respect songs that are all happy-go-lucky singing about what a wonderful life this is... but it's just not realistic. i can never really find inspiration to write when i'm in a good mood. i write when i'm pissed or sad or depressed or generally fucked up, because it usually relates to people better aswell as myself, and gives soul to the music.