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Poem... Depressing... Yet interesting... (Critiques are good)

imightbejesus

I Might Be Jesus... Maybe
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Alone in darkness, hidden by light
I wish to be alive and well
To do what I may
What I cherish most
Lives amongst the light
Hidden by the night
Living away from the day
Yet both are one and the same
Co-existing side by side.

Sit with me, in the dark
Wait with me for the sun to come
It will, yet I not know when
Yet if I see you wish to hide
Still I may wait
Be still at my side
For in the dark, I cannot see
So the world will have to wait
For us and our sunrise...

Needs a title, ya think?
I made this while applying for something online...
Go figure...
 

dustinzgirl

Banned - What an Asshat!
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Alone in darkness, hidden by light
I wish to be alive and well
To do what I may
What I cherish most
Lives amongst the light
Hidden by the night
Living away from the day
Yet both are one and the same
Co-existing side by side.
This first part is very nice, except the word co-existing takes away too much from the previous simplistic flow....
Sit with me, in the dark
Wait with me for the sun to come
It will, yet I not know when
Yet if I see you wish to hide
Still I may wait
Be still at my side
For in the dark, I cannot see
So the world will have to wait
For us and our sunrise...
Here, again, you start with flair and originality and a simple design, but lose it in the last line.