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_Kitana_

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ron said:
Written...It's called Rogues Gallery. I think I wrote it in 8th grade. I published it a long time ago.
nice, didn't think you would be a poet...

good work!

If you had it published then maybe I did stumble upon it somewhere...
 

ron

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_Kitana_ said:
nice, didn't think you would be a poet...

good work!

If you had it published then maybe I did stumble upon it somewhere...
Thanks. Probably so. I like to think that my character runs to great depths. Funny thing is, no one ever asks.

The poem is also very dated, since it was written when the Cold War was proceeding full steam. I like the concept behind nuclear weapons, but their use as a deterrent is limited unless one has the nuggets to use them. There was a good Saturday Night Live skit about that.
 

_Kitana_

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ron said:
Thanks. Probably so. I like to think that my character runs to great depths. Funny thing is, no one ever asks.

The poem is also very dated, since it was written when the Cold War was proceeding full steam. I like the concept behind nuclear weapons, but their use as a deterrent is limited unless one has the nuggets to use them. There was a good Saturday Night Live skit about that.
The rhyme scheme was very well thought out. I had to go back and reread it and look just to catch it cause it rhymed so smooth... that you didn't notice it just reading it. Good example here folks if you are looking at doing a more traditional rhyming poem…

Anyways...Yeah I could kind of tell it was a bit dated but it also holds somewhat true toda, that’s one of the reasons I was unsure if you wrote it, being as you have matured in your age. It didn't quite fit in with your character now as an adult. Do you still write?

Btw: Yeah Saturday Night live had some good shit btw… the old stuff is the best.
 

ron

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_Kitana_ said:
Anyways...Yeah I could kind of tell it was a bit dated but it also holds somewhat true toda, that’s one of the reasons I was unsure if you wrote it, being as you have matured in your age. It didn't quite fit in with your character now as an adult.
I like to think so.
_Kitana_ said:
Do you still write?
Only here.

And shell scripts.
 

Unforgiven

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meh... wrote this a year ago.

Shadows

I look back at things that were or could have been
My memory is blank, there is nothing to remember
Shadows cloud my thoughts, obscure my inner being
After all this, there is nothing left for me.
I can't give up yet, no way can I surrender.

I think back to days, both good days, and the bad.
They are all in Shadow, I cannot bring them back
I think about my friends, about the good times we had.
They are all gone, now there's nothing left for me.
I cannot forget them, won't let them fade to black.

I look up at pictures on my wall and try to find
The answers I know are hidden behind the walls.
I strive to see the past, but the past is far behind.
There is nothing there, nothing at all but shadows,
Yet I made it through, but with many slips and falls.
 

_Kitana_

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Unforgiven said:
meh... wrote this a year ago.

Shadows

I look back at things that were or could have been
My memory is blank, there is nothing to remember
Shadows cloud my thoughts, obscure my inner being
After all this, there is nothing left for me.
I can't give up yet, no way can I surrender.

I think back to days, both good days, and the bad.
They are all in Shadow, I cannot bring them back
I think about my friends, about the good times we had.
They are all gone, now there's nothing left for me.
I cannot forget them, won't let them fade to black.

I look up at pictures on my wall and try to find
The answers I know are hidden behind the walls.
I strive to see the past, but the past is far behind.
There is nothing there, nothing at all but shadows,
Yet I made it through, but with many slips and falls.
Not half bad...

You had some really awesome lines. What I am about to say is not being said to discourage you from writing, or to say I didn't like your poem, but there is more room for improvement on this poem.

While you had a good base and Idea, it was lacking the langue, the art, the poetic descriptive words, that so often draws you into poetry.That makes a REAL GOOD POEM! I felt from reading this poem that you was not really allowing all the emotion that you were trying to display flow.

However, like I said before I liked the poem, hope you will post more of your work up.
 

Unforgiven

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_Kitana_ said:
Not half bad...

You had some really awesome lines. What I am about to say is not saying this to discourage you from writing, or to say I didn't like your poem, but there is more for improvement on this poem.

While you had a good base and Idea, it was lacking the langue, the art, the poetic descriptive words, that so often draws you into poetry.That makes a REAL GOOD POEM! I felt from reading this poem that you was not really allowing all the emotion that you were trying to display flow.

However, like I said before I liked the poem, hope you will post more of your work up.
like i said, i wrote that a year ago. i still have yet to write a really good one. but if i write another half decent one, i'll post it. :p
 

_Kitana_

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Unforgiven said:
like i said, i wrote that a year ago. i still have yet to write a really good one. but if i write another half decent one, i'll post it. :p
did you notice my typos as I was telling you the points i liked and disliked


*giggles*
 

_Kitana_

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Unforgiven said:
i did notice. :indiff:
I just thought it was funny, the one picking out flaws then has a post full of them...

maybe you just find the lack of humor in it hehe

but at midnight and sleepless

i find it funny
 

Unforgiven

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_Kitana_ said:
:kickcan: It's good to laugh sometimes....
i must admit, i laughed when i read this:


Beelzebug (n.): Satan in the form of a mosquito that gets into your bedroom at 3 in the morning and cannot be cast out

but, back on topic...
 

_Kitana_

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Unforgiven said:
i must admit, i laughed when i read this:


Beelzebug (n.): Satan in the form of a mosquito that gets into your bedroom at 3 in the morning and cannot be cast out

but, back on topic...
LOL

Yeah....

hmmmmmmm.......... let me dig up a poem

OMG....

No i will let you guys read a poem jesse wrote for me lol

its the gimpest thing ever

hehe
 

_Kitana_

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All day long
an angel flys in my head
giving every thought her name
always on the tip of my tounge
at night she dominates my dreams
when i dream,
I dream of her baby blue eyes
and her smile that lightly plays her lips
I dream of my Angel
my baby...

Hehe

my soldier is no poet... he was in basic when he wrote it...
 

Solanaceae

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The Lost Song.
I had nine lives but I lost all of them,
And I’ve been searching the night,
And I’ve been searching in the rain.
I tried to find them,
But they disappeared,
They walked away they dressed in black,
They left my side and all I say,
Is that I wasted time,
When I looked for them,
For now I know that things gone past,
Are never to be found again,
No never, never again
I had nine lives,
But I lost all of them.

I had a plan,
But never finished it,
And I’ve been searching for the thought,
And I’ve been searching in a haze,
I try all days,
To remember it,
But now the blueprint in my mind has gone,
My mind forgot the colour of direction,
And my eyes they see the hands,
That could of built,
That could have constructed the empire in my mind;
The empire,
I'll never find,
I had a plan,
But that was where it ended.

Not my own work, I would rather keep that to myself. But by, The cat empire. Great band. I thought it sounded poetic.
 

_Kitana_

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this is a poetry thread, not a song lyric thread sorry...if you don't have orginal work, please reframe from posting someone else. Thanx you
 

screw_you_jack

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this sonnet is my most favorite thing i have ever written.
It is copyrighted 2003.


Truth marches boldly to unveil deceit
That cloaked old woes, which now fester and bleed.
Justice is crushed under uncaring feet,
The wise man's warning which no one will heed.
Trampled footprints in a desert of snow,
memories of where warm blood flowed, now cold.
The silence is amplified, time moves slow;
Blinded are we by the scars we still hold.
Our father's fathers and our brethren
sowed in our fields seeds that now we must reap,
blossoms, weeds, twisted vines, roses laced with sin.
Life moves on when we love and when we weep.
The life you live is yours and yours alone.
Let your forefathers ghosts rest with their bones.